Terry Boot: Character Application

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FULL NAME: Terrence John Boot

NICKNAMES: Terry, Tezza

AGE: 11

ALLEGIANCE: Neutral

HOGWARTS HOUSE: Gryffindor

WAND TYPE: Holly

PLAY BY Daniel Radcliffe

HAIR COLOR: Brown

EYE COLOR: Blue-Green

HEIGHT: 5'5"

BODY TYPE: Thin

GENERAL APPEARANCE: Tall, Dark brown hair, Gentle-looking,

CHARACTER STRENGTHS AND SKILLS:
Stamina
Strong
Braniac

CHARACTER WEAKNESSES:
Workaholic
Looks
Socialising

CHARACTER LIKES:
Mathematics (arithmancy)
Being smart
Magic

CHARACTER DISLIKES:
Tomato
Capsicum
Writing too much

GOALS:
To become an Auror

QUIRKS:
Often shivers for no reason

BOGGART: Death

PATRONUS: Finding out I'm a wizard

DEMENTOR: Every time I injure myself

AMORENTIA: Parchment

MIRROR OF ERISED: To be an Auror

PERSONALITY: Easily socialising with people, Terry often gets distracted, which is why you often find him alone, or frustrated when around people. Thhis shows he has self control and is assertive to his ways.

FATHER: Craig

MOTHER: Vivienne

SIBLING(S): Zoe

OTHER: N/A

BLOOD STATUS: Muggle-Born

RACE: Human

SOCIAL STATUS: Wealthy

PET(S):Cat


BROOMSTICK():
Nimbus 2002

OTHER POSSESSIONS:
Tales of Beedle the Bard

Early Years: Terry was growing up as an outsider.During his Muggle school years, no one like. He could do things no one else could. But when he was asked to show people, he couldn't. He found out he was a wizard at the age of 11. He is in his first year now.

YOUR NAME: Terry Watson

RP EXPERIENCE: None (apart from Runescape)

HOW YOU FOUND US: Youtube



RP SAMPLE: *Just walked out of a classroom* Man, I need a drink, All those speeches made my throat sore. *Opens door* I'm lost again... (a voice from behind)" That's common among first years" Where is the Charms class? "2nd corridor opposite side of the staircase" Thanks... (sheepishly)

Thank you for considering my application

Hey Terry.
Just a few things, your character is 14 right? So he's in 4th year? So you need to do your Hogwarts History, of the first four years at Hogwarts.
You also need to make your early history a bit longer, and your RP sample longer too.

Other than that, I can't see any problems.

Jess

Well, your PB pic does not look like Daniel Radcliffe to me. You might want to double check that too.

Thanks,
K.

Yes, I'm double posting. Ok, Terry. Your app looks good except for a couple of issues that, I think, will be easily repaired.

First, as Jess said, we do need to see more in your history for him so far at Hogwarts. Please lengthen that section. Please lengthen his early history section as well.

In your RP sample, they're always written in the third person, past, from your character's point of view. You need to shift the tense of how your sample is written so that we know you understand how posts are written here.

For example, here's a paragraph from a recent post I made. Maybe this helps.:

"Merely protecting myself," She said, pausing to conjure herself a cup of French Roast. She hated conjured coffee, but it was better than nothing. "You want a cup?" She didn't know of Rob to ever much like French Roast coffee, but she thought she woudl at least offer. " I had picked out that little skinny black dress you liked so much, but I can't hide a bloody thing in that," she sighed. She pushed her own wand into her right boot and Remus's into her left. "I don't want to hurt anybody, and I do not want to make it anybody else's responsibility to keep me in one piece. I need to take that piece of my life back. If I don't, I'm going to be running from little guys like Barker for the rest of my life. And you know what, he's not entitled to that much of me. Not ever again."


BY the way, thanks for changing your PB pics. Those looks much better. Its nice to have Dan Radcliff on here. I'm anxious to see him on the boards.

K.