Nick's Book

+1 The Muggle World+

Nick was 11 years old now he was diffrent then everyone else so he dident have friends untill he seen some old women that semed like she was stalking him."Who are you and why are you following me"He said to her "I am Professor Mcgoncall follow me"She said to him.Nick thought about it and started to follow her "I can do Magic im a witch you see and you are a wizard"Mcgoncall said "Prove it"Nick said wondering how she whould do it "I will just come with me I will take you to a place called Diagon Ally and help you get your supplies"Mcgoncall said to him as she started walking and Nick followed

Well so what do you think

+2 Diagon Ally+

"I need Money"Nick said looking around seeing that Mcgoncall wasent there as two girls walked up to him "Hi im Sophia Granger and this is my Sister Nikki Granger"Sophia said."Hello im Nick Potter" Nick said as he walked over to the wizard bank "Last Name please"A Goblin said "Potter"Nick said "Follow me"the goblin said as he led Nick to vault 693 "Take what you need"The Goblin said as Nick grabed 90 Gallons 50 Sickles and 20 Knuts "Im finshed"Nick said as the goblin led him back outside.
20 minutes later
"Well I got everything"Nick said "well lets go to Hogwarts" Sophia said.

So how is it so far

it pretty good so far, I expected a long story but it really a good short story.

Thanks once it get to Hogwarts it will be longer and there is a surprise about you and andrian in my story

um thanks but I didn't grow up with Andrian you know, I didn't meet him until I was in my 5th year and pregnant

+3 The Train+

Nick,Sophia and Nikki were walking around looking for somewhere to sit when a 7th year attacked him and Nikki and Soph ran away Nick went to the nearest corrider where he found two people "help me"he said to them as they walked out of the compartment "Darren picking on a first year are you"The boy said "Shut up Andrian"Darren said"Sectum Sempra"cast the girl as Darren begain running away"Curse you Elizabeth"Darren said as he fell to the ground"lets go we are at hogwarts"Andrian said as everyone got off the train



Ok here is the Years of people in my book so far

Nick (me)-1styear
Soph-1st year
Nikki-1st Year
Elizbeth-6th Year
Andrian-5th year
Darren-7th year

+4 The Sorting Hat+

The sorting was over almost everybody was sorted excpet for him "Nick Potter"The headmaster called out as Nick walked up and the Sorting Hat was placed on his head.Darren eyed Nick suspicly 'If hes in slythren ill beat the living crap out of him'Darren thought "Hmm Brave and mean when somone teases him GRYIFFENDOR"The Soring hat shouted as Nick walked over to Gryiffendor table.Darren thought 'lucky kid if he ever crosses me ill kill him'Darren thought some more

+5 New spells+

Nick knew tons of new spells but one day he encountred Darren "Nick I need your help"Darren said"What with"Nick asked as he kept walking down the halls"Defense Aginst the Dark Arts class"Darren asked"whats in it for me"Nick asked"Ill teach you spells"Darren said.
20 minutes later
"I want the spells now"Nick said "ok here"Darren took a piece of Parchment and wrote:
Avada Kevdara
Aqmenti
Crucio
Lumos
Alahmorah
and the incations and what they did "Thanks"Nick said

+6 Avada Kevdara+

"Nick did you hear sombody murdered the headmaster"Gin said "really who"Nick asked her "Nobody knows but the Avada Kevdara spell was involved"she said "after that Voldemort dispeared"."I think it was Voldemort who killed him"Nick said "Maybe but how did he get in Hogwarts"Gin said "A disguise"Nick suggested

Its good nick, but kind of brief. YOu should make your chapters longer..