NORTH, Elisabeth

Hey, Elisabeth!

Welcome to PA! I love when new members join.

Anyway, I'm reading your app, and I like her. I think she's a great Ravenclaw.

I have just one thing I'd like you to polish, though, please. I'm fine with her as an animagus, and I like that you've made her have to struggle with control of it, ie, when she gets nervous, etc. That is as it should be for her age. We do prefer that characters have abilities relatively close to their age and experience.

With that said, i'd prefer you to polish her history about her animagus a bit. technically, if her father was teaching her underaged magic, he was breaking wizarding law. he might have, perhaps, taught her by demonstrating things with his own animagus, which would be allowable by law. he's an adult. he can use his own animagus. or by having her read about animaguses. or by helping her with any bursts of accidental magic she might have had so she didn't get stuck in some animagus state. but he could not legally have been outright teaching her to use magic b/c the ministry has tracers out on all underaged magic--a problem harry ran into regularly in canon.

let me know if you need help!

thanks!
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I did add more to the information, how he taught them and such and I think that it should be good now, I'm on my phone right now so if the length is weird that's why.

Okay, it looks pretty good now. Just remember that even if she was taught/shown this ability at a younger age, she wouldn't be advanced in using it or anything at sixteen.

I'll accept her and sort her into Ravenclaw!