Professor Jemma Tiquelle's Review

Ok, so this is my review for the first task.

The first two marks will be awarded for creativity.
The following two for level, how your character coped with the tasks.
The next mark will be for grammar/spelling.
The next four marks will be awarded for the riddle.
The final mark is awarded for the general conclusion of the task.

All competitors seemed to disregard the more riddle/hints type of obstacles, so I will not be taking marks off of them for this.


ADEN WILLIAMS

Disqualified/pending.
Creativity 0/2
Level 0/2
Grammar/Spelling 0/1
Riddle 0/4
Conclusion 0/1
Total: 0/10


CHRISTABELLE WHITTLE

It wasn't too bad. The anti-gravity bit was quite similar to Goblet of Fire though, I must admit. Same with the devil's snare you used, later on. The boggart, if I remember correctly wasn't in the maze the first time (though I could be wrong). 0.5/2

It was qutie interesting to read. I didn't feel bored, or end up skimming through any of it. The thoughts were nice to read, good roleplaying skills. Your character dealt with the obstacles well, I liked it . 2/2

I think there was a typo or two, but nothing that noticable. 1/1

As for the riddle...quite a good answer. I think that you could have explained it in a bit more detail, you simply said time. None the less, it was a good answer. 3/4

Conclusion was pretty similar to the Goblet of Fire, I have to say. You managed to get out of it in a different method though, which was good. 0.5/1

Creativity 0.5/2
Level 2/2
Grammar/Spelling 1/1
Riddle 3/4
Conclusion 0.5/1
Total: 7/10


ABBEY DAWN

First, creativity. I thought your ideas were really good. None were copied at all from the books, they were very original. 2/2

Level...not so great. The obstacles just seemed to...stop. Abbey didn't seem to do anything, apart from run away. 0.25/2

Grammer/spelling, all fine, the odd typo, though to be expected. 1/1

Riddle...one of the best answers, methinks. Can't fault it. Your character's thoughts explained it well, though your actual verbal explanation could have been better. 3.75/4

Conclusion was better! Abbey actually did something! Not so sure sectumsempra was the best spell to use, though it does slash things open, something like relashio (spelling?) might have worked better. Still, it worked fine! 1/1

Creativity 1.75/2
Level 0.5/2
Grammar/Spelling 1/1
Riddle 3.75/4
Conclusion 1/1
Total: 8/10


SELWYN THORFIN

Creativity. Well there was tons of it! The courtyard, the mirrors, everything! I really liked it. Your creativity was debatably the best, congrats! 2/2

For level...your character dealt with the courtyard well, though I thought you could have done something a bit more with the mirrors, other than 'realising they were illusions'. Still, was a really good roleplay. It was a little too long, I thought, but none the less good. 1.5/2

Grammar and spelling, I didn't see any glaring errors, there was probably the odd typo here and there (there are in most pieces of writing), but nothing that stood out. 2/2

I don't know if it's just me, but your answer didn't make sense. If the Healer only heals those who can't heal themselves, then surely the Healer can't heal themself? I thought you were on a better track with the answer that the Healer was healed by someone in the village. You got through, though I don't see how, so I'll give you some credit. 2/4

You mentioned Venn diagrams. Being a maths geek, I love it xD. Ok, so you didn't have any obstacles after it, but you did a victory rap which made it interesting, so full marks here! 1/1

Creativity 2/2
Level 1.5/2
Grammar/Spelling 1/1
Riddle 2/4
Conclusion 1/1
Total: 7.5/10