CUFFE, Mason Thomas

Hey Krissu,

You have a good foundation for Mason here but he can be polished a little bit.

Right now, He seems a little bit too "evil" and self centered - even for a Slytherin. If it isn't any trouble, I'd like you to change that a bit. Maybe make him a little bit more caring? It can just be with his sister or something, you can even make it a secret thing.

He just needs to be toned down a tad with being self centered.

~Hit

I did put that she cares about her sister, maybe in future he can trust someone else more.

I'm noticing some of the things Hitame does, Krissu.

Its okay if he has trust issues. That's understandable. However, he seems like he's too dark and too conceited. And a bit too overpowered.

A 17 year old should not have abilities in manipulation and controlling others that are quite as developed as it looks like they are here.

I really do need you to tone down some of that stuff, please, so he's a bit more balanced.

Em... i took these then out now. I truly don't know what to else to do and add there now.

hm...taking it all out isn't what I was hoping for either. LOL. Some of that is really good. Lets give it a bit of thought. For his age, he probably is working on trying to become charismatic so that its easier for people to want to give him what he wants. That would fit with some of your other traits.

He probably also is pretty good at persuasion. Perhaps he's also learning he can be intimidating if he has to be. but they should be traits he's learning.

Or perhaps he's a bit intellectual and enjoys the contest of trying to outwit someone into giving him what he wants. There are a lot of ways to go with that.

I'd like to see him do that well with, perhaps, underclassmen, and then perhaps have some of the grads not see him as all that. Sort of giving him the "Really?" look if he tries it on them. LOL. I can see him as being competitive enough that he might see that as a challenge rather than a rebuff

Does any of this make sense?

Em.. it makes sense yeah but I don't know how to that all right now write down. I need to think about it.. for awhile... My mind lately is quite slow and yeah it takes some time to thinks out too.

Krissu,

We allow 14 days for every app. We really want to see your character up and running. Let us know how we can help you to get your app completed.

K.

If there is something else what I should write down let me know. I just haven't had lately much time to think what to write down. It's not easy if you have your sister and cousin all the time around you and they annoy you when they want and so on.

I know how that is. i'll go over it again and get back to you.