PENDING!
Okay, it looks good so far but we need to fine tune her a little bit.
+ First off, why is she so damn short? I first thought the wand looked a little on the short side but then the height seemed to back that up. Harry's first wand was 11 inches and he was tiny. My problem is that she's about the size of a nine-year-old and there doesn't seem to be anything in her app that backs that up. If you want her to be on the short side then put her along the 4ft 11/5ft mark.
+ Secondly, she wouldn't be good at duelling. She's a first year so duelling probably wouldn't have ever come up. Fair enough if she saw it a lot as a kid but she wouldn't be proficient in it yet. Perhaps as she ages IC her ability can increase from awareness to great skill. Her knowledge of magic is probably quite limited at this point so duelling is a no-no.
+ Thirdly, First years aren't allowed brooms, why does she have one? How good is she at flying? Unless she was taught at home she wouldn't have learned how to fly until this year. Also, why would her father have given her his Firebolt...surely he would have given it to her elder brother - that's something to expand on.
+ Fourthly, why does she want to be a model? I understand the broom bit because her love of flying seems evident but why would she want to go into the Fashion Industry? I see she likes fashionable clothes but I can't really see why she's leaning towards modelling.
+ Fifthly, I think 'depressive' is too harsh, too extreme. At the most she probably comes off a bit introverted as she seems happy with her own company (there has been no mention of friends) and if she's 'depressive' because she's away from her family then wouldn't 'homesick' be more appropriate?
Just sort this out and you're good to go!