WOW your here!

Xemnas sat down in the common room,tired from all that school work he's been doing.He sits on one of the couches and stares at the fire,he loves to see how some fire sparks pop out and reach the fire wood.Just when he thought everything was ok he sees he's brother who apparently just finished he's old school and got accepted into gryffindor "hey Sora,what have you been up to"Xemnas tells him.

Hi Xem ! Sora said in a loud voice. But then Sora saw Xemnas was tried and didn't look happy with all the work and trouble he had in school. So Sora just sat next to him a look at the fire. But something made Sora want to ask a question to Xemnas about classes in gryffindor. What made him like magic ? Even seen he came here Xemnas never talk to me about magic and how class went . So may be it was a good chance to talk about now. Sora said.

((Hey, just a few small things.

You're speaking in the present tense, it needs to be spoken in past tense.

e.g.
Xemnas sat down in the common room, tired from all that school work he'd been doing. He sat on one of the couches and stared at the fire, he loved to see how some fire sparks pop out and reach the fire wood. Just when he thought everything was ok he saw his brother who apparently just finished his old school and got accepted into Gryffindor. "Hey Sora, what have you been up to?" Xemnas asked him

See, with just a few little changes of wording you're now within the site's way of posting.

Also, you're only just making the word limit, try using more adjectives and describe the way Xemnas is feeling to push it up a little.

If you'd like some help on improving your posts, there's a course we run, i think, to help with writing quality and such.

Jess))

((Sora, you need to use quotation marks so i can see where you're talking, otherwise tis all good!))

He looked back at Sora and noticed that he had asked him a question "hmmm well I wanted to know how it feels to do all these spells,and maybe I could help some people my protecting them or something"Xemnas told him with great confusion.Xemnas at the moment wasn't even sure,all he knew right now was that he wanted to battle.Xemnas wanted to duel,but before he asked about that Xemnas asked Sora another question."What made you want to come here"

"You Xemnas, you are the answer why I wanted to come here"Sora said. Sora took his wand out and agree to fight .Even if Xemnas is stronger he will not stop. Sora look at the fire that look like it was going out but trys to not distract him self with the fire. But now he felt pressure and he look around the room and felt like if it got smaller."Sora starts to move his wand around to see what moves to use".

(heh lol)

"woah woah woah wait,hold on.First lets find a good place to duel"Xemnas told him he then looked to the ceiling thinking of a good place."hmmmm how about the grounds"Xemnas asked Sora.He then turned his head back at the fire and dazed off just looking at it.He had noticed it went out and the lights went out,he then took out his wand pointed it at the wood in the fireplace and incantation said draconifors.The fire lit up again and he awaited the answer of sora

Sora stop moving his wand and agree to his answer." Fine the grounds are good". "But first you need to answer this question,"Sora told him with thought. "Why were you confused with answering my question". Sora knew that Xemnas was hiding something away from him but Xem doesn't tell him. Now the fire was bright and it look like it was not going to go out.